Metaverse, article about metaverse as another human experience

I have paper but must be more robust and have some inclination with philosophy. I would like that the introduction to have a better connection with the rest of the article and especially be much more interesting for the reader. I would also like the reality of the metaverse will be better explained and underline that it is not a good reality, but it can make a lot of mess in the relationship between the people. 

I like the statement about the ethical dimension of the metaverse, which would be good to strengthen.